User:Clarob16/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Citarum River

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article because as one of the world's most polluted rivers it is an important example of the environmental fallout and public health crisis that can occur when there are few restrictions on how pollution in Industry. My preliminary impression of the article itself was that it is very brief and provides a very general overview of the river, leaving out some important information about public health, environmental, and economic issues as a result of the pollution.

Evaluate the article
Review:

Lead section:

The lead section of the article is very brief and could probably could include more detail about the sources of pollution, more about the importance of the river, and information about revitalization. Another issue with the lead section is that not all the topics mentioned in the introduction have corresponding section.

Sources:

This article is well sourced, typically having a citation every 1-4 sentences. All the sources seem to be from reputable sources that include articles reviewing existing research and news organizations.

Content:

The article is written with a neutral and balanced viewpoint. However, there are big gaps in the content of the article.


 * I think it would be important to talk about how the pollution along the river has effected the health of the people that live around it. In the pollution section of the article there is a whole list of all the toxins and chemicals being dumped in the river and it could be valuable to discuss the effects of each of those chemicals on the environment and people.
 * The article touches on a lot of key topics and I think the structure of the article is there, it's just that a lot of it needs to be elaborated on and some of them need to be divided into their own sections. For example, I think the pollution category needs to be expanded on talking more about the role of textile factories, but also mentioning how insufficient infrastructure in the cities around the river cause many people to throw their trash and even human waste into the river. In addition, the effects of pollution need to be expanded on and maybe created into their own sections, i.e. agriculture, water supply, fishery, industry, sewerage, and electricity.