User:Clauf20/Pott's disease/IssaEm Peer Review

General info
Clauf20
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Clauf20/Pott%27s_disease?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Pott's disease:

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi Clauf, Heres some input i have for your article you're working on!

Lead:

I've notice you don't really have a whole introduction to the epidemiology of Potts disease, i'm sure you are still working on how you want to introduce the epidemiology of Potts but definitely add in a little introduction of epidemiology.

Content:

I did see that there is not much added as a whole for Potts disease but what you do have is a great start, i think if you can get a little more information to beef up what you currently have would be beneficial for those who will read what you add in the future!

Additionally there could be more information about prevalence and incidence of the disease with regards of what you currently have.

Organization:

I do see that you have a general outline how you want to organize your article and it is well done, i do think there could be more to be added information wise.

I would continue to work on phrasing some words to make it easier to understand for those who do not know medical terminology when you continue to add more information.

Tone and Balance:

So far i think the tone and balance and overall neutral information is well done, especially how you mention where people are more at risk occupation wise.

Sources/References:

While looking over your references i do see where you could add some more information, but you have done a great job summarizing and putting it into your own words of Potts, but i would mention some more about the ages affected more often in your draft!