User:Clay Collison/Self-control/Bibliography

You will be compiling your bibliography and creating an outline of the changes you will make in this sandbox.

Outline of Proposed Changes:

 * The first paragraph of the lead section is difficult to read as the ideas don't build off of one another and seem to be sporadically thrown together. We will reorganize the information so that it is coherent and flows well.


 * The lead section falsely claims that self control is an executive function. Earlier it mentions inhibitory control (an executive function), and I believe the author meant to say that self control is AN ASPECT of the executive function, inhibitory control. We will fix this.


 * The lead section includes information describing self control that is meant to define executive functions. We will make clear the distinction between executive functions and self control and explain how self control relates to the concept of executive functions.


 * The lead contains a paragraph about self control and its connection to the Theory of Crime that isn't relevant to the article. We plan to cut this paragraph.