User:CleanBean/Sleepwalking/IanWilliams25 Peer Review

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CleanBean
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Cynthia. The information that you have added in is very helpful for expanding the body of information that was provided on the original page. I doubt I will be able to use much from the same source as you, but the source is very reliable. The only suggestion I have is to reword the additions you have made and try your best to shorten it to be more concise.

'''Thank you for your suggestion. I used many sentences because I wanted to expand on the meaning of the research.'''