User:CleanBean/Sleepwalking/Uiseon1012 Peer Review

General info
CleanBean (Cynthia Edoh)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:CleanBean/Sleepwalking:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sleepwalking:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi, Cynthia!

Overall, your sandbox draft contains concise and easy-to-understand information. You used proper citation secondary literature review of fewer than ten years. Also, I suggest you avoid the word "study," which sounds like a research paper. Maybe you could think you're introducing the knowledge based on your finding. However, it was interesting to learn about the association between behavioral and emotional problems in sleepwalking.

'''Hey Sunny. Thanks for the feedback. I used the word "study" because I thought it would portray a more neutral tone, but seeing otherwise, I'll adjust the wording.'''