User:Clerie/Vava (rapper)/LisaA1X Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)

Clerie


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:

User:Clerie/Vava (rapper)

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

Yes. The original Wikipedia page just briefly writes about Vava's performance in The Rap of China, and the Lead updated new information about her earlier experience, background, and how she becomes famous. In addition, it also reflects how she makes and influences Chinese Hip-hop.


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

Yes. the Lead descriptions on the topic are concise and in order, and I can read it smoothly. It helps audiences to learn more about Vava.


 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?

Yes. For example, when the Lead talks about the The Rap of China, she also briefly describes what this variety show is to help audience have better understanding.


 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?

Yes. The Lead updated the early life of Vava and Chinese Hip-hop that is not present in the ariticle.


 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

It is Concise

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

Yes, the content is relevant.


 * Is the content added up-to-date?

Yes


 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

No

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?

Yes


 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

No


 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

No. The viewpoints are neutral do not no overrepresented or underrepresented contents.


 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

No. The content added is based on the sources without any personal attempt to lead audience to follow you.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

Yes. The sources are reliable.


 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?

Yes


 * Are the sources current?

Yes, the sources are recently.


 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Yes.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

Yes, the content is organized and concise.


 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

No. When I read through the content, I did not find the grammatical or spelling errors.


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Yes. Clerie separates the contents to 4 sections to help audience easily find the section.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?

No, it does not have image.


 * Are images well-captioned?

No image


 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?

No image


 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

No image

For New Articles Only
It is not new article, so it does not apply

If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?

Does not apply


 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?

Does not apply


 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?

Does not apply


 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Does not apply

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?

Yes, it added a lots good quality information to the content to help Wikipedia visitors to learn more about Vava. For example, I learned that Vava started her performance in Chengdu and traveled with performance in her early life. Also, she became famous when she attended The Rap of China.


 * What are the strengths of the content added?

Clerie does not only make the events in order by years it happened, but also categorize it with more deep way, such as reflecting it with the impact of Chinese Hip-hop.


 * How can the content added be improved?

Clerie could improve the content by adding a table to collect all album and music Vava released, so it can provide clear visualization to audience.

Overall evaluation
Overall, the content is concise, easy to read, and interesting. The topic is Vava, the rapper from China. I did not know Vava before, and I went through the original Wikipedia page. It just tell the basic information about her, such as her name, her age, where she is from, and one song about her. So, I felt there were more information to add on. Then, I read through tClerie's content. It has more information the original Wiki page is missing. For example, it tells what the name Vava comes from, it is because the pronunciation in China is Wawa and matches her baby face. Also, I think the paragraphs are organized and smooth. There is no a big gap in the paragraphs, so I did not jump from one sentence to another one. Also, if the new elements or words which are not familiar to most people, it has some brief explanation to help audience to understand it. By comparing to the original wiki page about Vava and Clerie's content, I strongly agree that Clerie added new high quality information. Also, I opened some of the sources, and they are reliable. I think the content could be better if Clerie added new information about Vava's activities, maybe also add about if she has changed her hip-hop style, and how she changed it.