User:Cleverfruit/Nakkaş Sinan Bey/Tactfulsitta82 Peer Review

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Cleverfruit
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cleverfruit/Nakkaş Sinan Bey
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nakkaş Sinan Bey

Evaluate the drafted changes
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First off: WOW! you really expanded on this stub, the article looks great at first glance!

The lead is pretty good. It provides a solid overview of what one can expect, but it does feel a little bogged down, maybe shortening/combining the last few sentences would help! A bit more info on where he lived or important works could be relevant.

The information in the life section is all very relevant, and helps aid my understanding of who he was and how exactly his background might inform his art. The information analyzing each of the pieces of art is interesting, and helps me to understand his art.

Tone-wise, there are some statements that are not strongly biased, but still place a lot of value/importance on objects with no citation backing them up. For example, this claim: "Even so, the painting remains to be paradigmatic of artistic styles in Ottoman portraiture during Sinan Bey's lifetime in the late 1400s." about the first work seems like a pretty bold claim with no citation.

Especially in the Life section the article needs more citations. There are only 4 citations in all of the Life section, and there is a lot of information that needs a source. The entire first two-thirds of the second paragraph needs to be backed up. All of the citation links work and seem reputable. There also seems to be a broad range of authorship.

The content is well written and organized, though there are some sentences that are rather long!

The photos seem alright, except for the last one, I couldn't quite track down enough information about it.

Overall, some very solid improvements, just needs to be looked over again and some more citations!