User:Clhild/Denali National Park and Preserve/Bnthomas17 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Clhild


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Clhild/Denali_National_Park_and_Preserve?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I absolutely loved the amount of information you have created, especially under the section "Permafrost", as it seems like you created the entire section yourself. I liked how you kept your sentences relatively short, very straight-to-the-point, as I think that is what Wikipedia wants added from us rather than long drawn-out sentences. With that being said, that whole section on Permafrost might be too much for the site, but if you believe that all of that information in that section is pertinent to the reader's knowledge and understanding of the subject then I say you should keep it. In addition, I thought the addition under the section "Glaciers" was short and sweet. The articles or other journals that you obtained this information from is reliable and should not be a cause for concern as the NPS and National Geographic are reputable sources.