User:Clhild/Denali National Park and Preserve/KatF91 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Clhild


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Clhild/Denali_National_Park_and_Preserve?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Denali National Park and Preserve

Evaluate the drafted changes
The addition of discussing climate change is very important for the permafrost topic at this park. I think you did a great job with your addition and research. I would not start a sentence with the word "Because", so maybe start it with "Current climate change is attributing to..."