User:Clockwisecrocodile/Mercury contamination in California waterways/Marcuz Flores Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) John Donnely


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Mercury contamination in California waterwaysLink to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * The topic is Mercury contamination, Joh does well to keep his ideas relevant, as keeping on topic through out his work.
 * John did well in keeping a neutral bias he has plenty of information that stays neutral and gives examples and information on both natural mercury or "organic and nonorganic" mercury. He offered plenty of information on the matter and expresses his own and a general concern on the matter. I seen he used three resources. The resources are verified and are from a reliable source. He did well in not copying words or phrases and kept to the plagiarism guidelines and rules. I think his presentation of the information gathered was not over pressed. I think he had a good amount of background information. His topic of human effects was very informative and kept a neutral bias as too not press his own agenda.
 * Overall the Johns project is coming along well and I think he doesn't need much correction on his entry so far, but I would say to maybe revise the order in which the information is delivered. Just to be able to follow easier.