User:ClosingtheGap/Omnigenic model/NCcunyevo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ClosingtheGap


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ClosingtheGap/Omnigenic_model?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Omnigenic model

Evaluate the drafted changes
The author does an excellent job introducing an otherwise very complex topic, in digestible and understandable form. Breaking the greater model down into pieces like "all genes expressed within a cell effect the expression of a given trait" make it far easier especially for the casual reader to take it one piece at a time, and allow each piece to build forward to the next. This allows the author to get into the more detailed information in their next sections.

I would suggest to the author that while this method of breaking down each topic into subsections does make it more digestible, reducing the scientific prose is probably still needed to some degree to make it more palatable for the casual reader. Mentioning things like "cell specific disease pathways" and varying levels of heritability require prior knowledge that non scientists may just not have, even in going through other wikipedia pages.

This I think ties to the most important changes needed in the piece, which in my opinion would be the evidence subheading of the article. While the concepts and theory is outlined here, inclusion of modern applications, examples, and ultimate goals of the field would be hugely beneficial to engaging the reader. Being able to match these ideas to concrete existing systems helps the reader get excited to learn more and gives them a reason to care about the topic outside of just wanting to understand hyper detailed mechanisms within evolutionary biology, and seems to me as more in line with the goals of wikipedia. This could also lend to a great place to include some images!

Ultimately this article was really helpful for me to read additionally however, as it has definitely helped me better realize how much explanation of additional niche terms and concepts my article is currently lacking. I will definitely be applying some of the authors technique of breaking apart broader theories into digestible pieces to better communicate some of the more niche ideas included in my topic.