User:ClosingtheGap/Omnigenic model/Slaw88 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ClosingtheGap


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ClosingtheGap/Omnigenic_model?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Omnigenic model

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead section has been updated and include a concise introductory sentence that clearly describe the topic. Although concise, it does not reflect the new content added or major sections of the article.

The added contents are current and relevant to the topic. It may be appropriate to include a schematic to better explain the model, if such exist in the literature. The writing tone is neutral and balance.

The new content id backed up by current sources. However, There are a number of paragraphs that lack any form of citation. The reference links are not clickable, so I could not test if the work or not.

The draft is generally well-written but there are a couple of grammatical errors. For instance, the use of the word effect instead of affect in the following sentence: “Expanding beyond polygenes, the authors propose that all genes expressed within a cell effect the expression of a given trait.”. Also, providing brief explanation (perhaps, in parenthesis) of jargon, such as peripheral and core genes, render the write up easier to read. I will advise you proof read and make necessary corrections, including missing indefinite articles.

Overall, this is a good update on the article. Please keep the suggested improvements at heart as you develop the article. I look forward to reading an updated version soon.