User:Cmm014/Human impact on marine life/Indislo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cmm014


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cmm014/Human_impact_on_marine_life?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Human impact on marine life

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead does a good job at describing what at hand is going on before it goes into each of the different causes that have impacted marine life. There is a wide variety in the structure to make sure all the bases are covered. Reading through the article, I do notice a biased towards not impacting the marine life violently, which I agree with, however I believe it takes away from the article at whole. The article should be going over the content at whole, not pointing to it and saying its bad. It is, but there should be facts to back up why it is bad. The most obvious example, to me, is the quote tethered to reference 9. I do not think it should be there. I also found a lot of uses of "may" in the article which feels like we do not know that this impact is impacting the marine life, but we do. It is a bit confusing. Other than that the article is really well made. The references are very informative, as well as the article itself. It is definitely written by people who know what they are talking about and who are interesting in this topic as well.