User:Cmoliva14/WASH/SarHasUCSC Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cmoliva14


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cmoliva14/WASH
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * WASH

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

I thought that mentioning climate change and its impacts on WASH was a really great addition to the Lead section! Climate Change has a subsection later in the article, but I feel like it's a foundational aspect of WASH moving forward into a future of climate change so it deserved to be mentioned in the Lead. To me, the part "... particular in Sub-Saharan Africa where access to safely managed basic sanitation is low. In Sub-Saharan Africa poorly managed WASH systems and widespread informal settlements with limited access to water and sanitation infrastructure are particularly vulnerable to the effects of climate change such as more droughts and floods..." seems a bit too specific to be in the Lead. I think it's a super good point worth mentioning in the Climate Change subsection, but maybe not in the Lead. I might omit the parts about Sub-Saharan Africa in the Lead and say something more general like "Climate change poses increased risk to WASH systems. Changes in the frequency and intensity of climate extremes could compound current challenges as water availability becomes uncertain, and health risks increase due to contaminated water sources. The effects of climate change can cause a decrease of water availability, an increase of water necessity, damage to WASH facilities, increased water contamination from pollutants, etc.".

Content:

"With many of the difficulties women have faced to combat the effects climate change has on WaSH systems, women in more arid and rural parts of the world can be seen as agents of adoptions and hope towards climate change impacts...": I really like this idea! I think it's important to recognize and honor the role of women in WASH. I am a little confused about where this will fit into the content (under which subsection) and why/how women are agents of hope towards climate change impacts. I really like where this is going but maybe you could clarify a little more :)

Organization:

Your additions are super well written! I totally understand what you're saying. I think my only suggestion would be flushing out the part about women as agents of hope and generalizing the Lead section.

Overall:

I think your additions were really important! Emphasizing the role of climate change in WASH is huge because it is so deeply connected to it, especially moving forward into a future of climate change. Nice job!