User:Cms1982/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Bariatric surgery

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(Briefly explain why you chose it, why it matters, and what your preliminary impression of it was.)

I chose this article because I just finished researching long term prognosis of bariatric surgery and how it effects other comorbidities.

This article is important for someone who has no idea what bariatric surgery is and its importance to weight loss and the effects bariatric surgery can have on a person both long and short term.

My first impression of the article is it seems to be a good article for information. There are many citations. The author uses pictures to help give the reader a better idea of what they are looking at. There are subheadings on many issues related to the different type of weight loss procedures, the risks and complications bariatric surgery, and the benefits of the surgeries.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)

This article's lead sentence lets the reader know exactly what bariatric surgery is and is concise. It briefly explains what the article is about but doesn't include every aspect of the article. I think adding a little more about bariatric surgery to the main paragraph would be helpful to the reader.

The article has good content. It mentions briefly about how the criteria for weight loss is different among American and Asians and the criteria for adolescents. I would like to see more statistics on other ethnic groups such as Hispanics, African Americans, and the middle Eastern population if any information is available. This article includes information on the positive effects of weight loss surgery such as a decrease in weight, reduction in diabetes, decreased mortality, and mental health improvement. It also includes the risk and complications of weight loss surgery such as gallstones, kidney stones, pregnancy issues that can arise, and post-surgical complications. The many different weight loss surgery techniques and how they are preformed are also included in the article. Under the history sub heading, there needs to be more information on the history of bariatric surgery and how it has evolved. It would also be informative to know if any new weight loss procedures or surgeries are in development and being tested.

A neutral tone is used for this article. It is not made to persuade but rather to inform. The author only uses facts and not their own opinion.

The author used a lot of sources. There are some meta-analysis sources, journals, and books. The few links I clicked on came from pub med central. Most sources are from within the last 10 years. And the newest edits were made in 2023.

The article is well written and broken down into easy-to-read subheadings. If the reader just wanted to read about the types of bariatric surgeries, it would be easy to find in this article. The lay out makes it easy for anyone to find the basic information they would need for whatever aspect they are looking for relating to bariatric surgery.

The article includes images that are easy to understand. The pictures give the reader a better idea on how the differ weight loss surgeries work. I would like to see some charts, if available, on comparing and contrasting weight loss with bariatric surgery vs conventional weight loss. Also showing a chart on weight loss with each procedure would give the reader an idea of what the best weight loss surgery may be.

When reading the talk section, this article has had many edits since 2009 to make it a more informative, easier to read, and more of an accurate article. In 2022 and 2023, this article became part of the wiki education foundation and was part of a wiki project.

I think this article is a good quick source for general information on bariatric surgery. I agree with one of the comments in the talk section. They could use less medical jargon for the non-medical personal. As I mentioned above, more information on different ethnic groups would be informative along with more charts for the reader to compare. Overall, this would be a good article for someone who wants some basic knowledge on bariatric surgery.