User:Cmurphy22/Acetobacter aceti/Mgcorn5051 Peer Review

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User:Cmurphy22/Acetobacter aceti User:Cmurphy22/Acetobacter aceti - Wikipedia Acetobacter aceti - Wikipedia
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Article Comments (organization, grammar details, & wording)

 * Make sure that all "Acetobacter aceti" is "A. aceti" as you mentioned it the first time in the first sentence, and then you can shorten it after that.
 * Don't forget that the microbe's name must always be in italics
 * Simplify the descriptions of A. aceti in the "lead" section with terms we have covered in class, i.e. thermophile, strictly aerobic, etc. It goes back and forth between using the terminology and explaining how that is relevant to where the microbe is found. I recommend first having a simple sentence that uses all of the descriptive terminology, and then going into depth later on in the article.


 * "Industrial Use - Acetic Acid"
 * Reword the "Industrial Use - Acetic Acid" section in order to be more concise. Additionally, it read like a repeat of what was stated in the introduction, I recommend rewording the introduction as well as finding additional sources to include more in-depth information.
 * Can include the information in the "Safety" section here, as they intertwine. If desired, could make "Safety" a sub-sub-header of "Industrial Use - Acetic Acid"
 * "Industrial Use - Diabetes"
 * Unclear what probiotics have to do with the microbe
 * Recommended to include a one-sentence synopsis about what type II diabetes is., and then a separate sentence about how A. aceti can help with its treatment (be more specific about the mechanism of action)
 * many potential key words that can be hyperlinked
 * "Industrial Use" can be moved lower in priority, "Metabolism" and "Growth" can be moved up