User:Cmzeran/Medieval European magic/GwenJ210 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cmzeran


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cmzeran/Medieval_European_magic?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Medieval European magic

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I think your edits have really strengthened the article. I know in your flipgrid video you were concerned about flow and content, but I found the edits to be really helpful and consistent. On the word doc you sent to me, I tried to help by fixing some simple grammatical issues, but I do think you are on a really good track so far. I think you did a really good job with the prosecution section, all of the information added to that was very well done and helpful as well as the information added to the medical magic section. If there's any section that I feel like could have more information (if your sources have the information), I would suggest the divination section. It's an interesting topic, but there isn't too much there. Tonally, I think you really matched the original poster and made it so the information flows really well, there isn't a harsh difference between their additions, your additions, or even Sidney's prior additions. If I wasn't going between the original article and your document, I'm not sure I would have known where your edits began or not! I'll send the word doc back to you over email.