User:Cnoellec49/Undertreatment of pain/Rani110 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Amyzhou314, Cnoellec49, and TeakHo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cnoellec49/Undertreatment of pain


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Undertreatment of pain

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft is very informative, you all did a really great job!

The "Lead" section could be updated to offer more of a detailed and concise overview of the additions you all made and the sections that existed already.

Some of the sources are older than 10 years, so there could be more updated sources to use but I also understand if perhaps there isn't as much newer existing research in the field on the topic. It may be helpful to include a section that looks at the intersection of marginalized racial and gender groups and the undertreatment of their pain, such as Black women.

You all use a neutral tone and reliable sources throughout the article. To further support your claims in the "Gender" section, you all could cite some more sources.

The links in the "References" section work, but I think the Cullen et al. article link needs to be inserted under the first section.

The article is organized really well. The analysis of sickle cell disease and undertreatment of communities of color is a really informative example and supports your overarching point about how these communities are often neglected by the healthcare system. I'm wondering if there's a way to tie in systemic oppression to the "Causes" section? Expanding on the analysis in this section with the different added regions/countries is great.

Overall, you all added some really helpful context and examples to this page!

Rani110 (talk) 21:11, 10 April 2021 (UTC)