User:Cnvillal/Alicia Garza/Ivonneraya1998 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Username Cnvillal/Alicia Garza.

Peer review by Ivonne Raya

Your general information about Garza is very detailed and keep in a neutral tone. I reccomend you to expand a little longer on her education since she studied at UCSd and is an ambassador of women of color. Have in mind that your information about People united for a better life in Oakland is the assumption that your reader has background information about the topic. Try to provide a tried explanation of what was the people united program and expand. Your references were up today and did expand your information presented on your sandbox draft.

Your information about she was a supported about birth control and sex educator in Oklahoma was fascinating due that she was born in an era that this was a sensitive topic to try to help people understand and be open to start a conversation.

suggestions: Expand on your explanation try to be on the side of the reader, they need to be given some sort of background of each point in order to fully digest the information to its full capacity.

Try finding more information about her School of Unity and Liberation. This is a great example that is an intersting subject taken into account the past three years the states have face. Its also a good way to bring awareness of her work and the benefits it had on students of color and other cultures.


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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cnvillal/Alicia_Garza?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cnvillal/Alicia_Garza?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

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