User:CoRi326/Chain Novel/Normalusername123 Peer Review

fGeneral info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CoRi326


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CoRi326/Chain_Novel?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A
 * based off of Chain novel

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
The lead section is new, written for the new article. The lead is concise and defines chain writing well, but could potentially be expanded to summarize the main points of the article (i.e., process, education, chain novel).

Content

 * Content is great!
 * Sources are all very recent
 * Re: equity gap: Are there any examples chain writing done by diverse or underrepresented authors that you could mention? Could you potentially expand on the ELL aspect within education? (I know these are limited by the sources you can find; these are just ideas.)

Tone

 * You do a great job staying neutral. I don't think there are any problems there.

Organization
Overall organization, grammar, writing, etc. is great. A couple of picky things:


 * In the first line of your process section, you use the phrase "something along those lines," which felt really conversational and out of place to me within the rest of the article. Maybe "or a similar starting point" or something like that?
 * In the second paragraph of the education section, you say "chain writing allows for the collaboration to be introduced to the process." I would delete "the" in front of collaboration.
 * In the third sentence of the third paragraph under education, you repeat "students to" twice by mistake.
 * In the last paragraph of the education section, should it be "One limitation that comes about..."?

Images or Media
N/A... and I don't really think adding them would be helpful

New Articles

 * notability standards: yes
 * exhaustive list of sources: yes?
 * pattern of similar articles: yes
 * link to other articles: yes

Overall Impressions

 * Great job
 * The content is easy to understand but still taught a lot that I didn't know before reading the article. I would just say to expand the lead section a bit and maybe talk more about using chain writing for ELL purposes if you can find sources.