User:Coccinellee/Azza Ghanmi/Pinkbabybruin Peer Review

General info
I am reviewing Coccinellee's work.
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Coccinellee/Azza Ghanmi
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):User:Coccinellee/Azza Ghanmi

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The lead is well-written and a solid introduction to the article. It is adequately updated to reflect any new information and does a great job of giving an overview of the subject. However, I think it is slightly too long and may go too much into depth, especially as some parts of the Lead could be moved into the later sections of the article.

Content

The content of the article is highly relevant to the subject. It covers her work in various organizations, and discusses a magazine she was heavily involved in. The article deals with many topics that are directly related to historically underrepresented populations or topics, specifically Middle Eastern feminism and anti-imperialism.

Tone and Balance

The content of the article is very neutral and fact-based. There doesn't appear to be any bias or over-representations of certain viewpoints. I personally did not feel swayed to favor any specific positions as I read the article.

Source and References

The article is well-cited. The sources all appear to be reputable; the information drawn from them in the article reflect the meaning and facts from the original sources. They are relevant to the time period and are written by various authors, spanning different genders and origins. It doesn't seem as though they are better sources, as they are all peer-reviewed articles. The links also work.

Organization

While I think the article is well-organized, I think it can be structured differently to improve its flow. Firstly, there are certain parts of the lead, particularly the last paragraph, that can be moved into the body of the article. I also believe it that the third and second sections are flipped, allowing it to flow from general to more specific information.

Images and Media

There is one image in the article of a relevant location. It is well-captioned and provides more context for the subject. It is also located in a visually pleasant location.

New Article

This is a new article that complies with all of the regulations. It is supported by more than five secondary sources, all of which are peer-reviewed. The list of sources spans a diverse spectrum of authors and appears to cover all literature available about the subject. It has embedded links and follows the same structure as other pages.

Overall Impressions

I think the article covers a good amount of information about Azza Ghanmi. It is comprehensive and details the various organizations she was involved in, going into depth about her magazine and her contributions to it, including the choice she made to leave. I think there could be more information relevant to the subject herself or how she worked within the organizations; while each section does outline her work, it's appears focused on the organizations themselves. However, I understand that the available literature on Azza Ghanmi may be mostly related to the organizations, so this is likely why. Overall, the article is well-written and informative, and I feel as though it contributes to necessary feminist literature.