User:Coco0245/Chinese patriarchy/Breadrhix Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

cocomiller


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cocomiller/Chinese_patriarchy/Bibliography?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_bibliography
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chinese patriarchy

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

I really like the topic of this article, it is a very interesting topic. At the beginning of the article, I briefly explain the patriarchal society in China before the 1930s, I think this paragraph can be written a little bit more, after all, the topic is the history of patriarchal society.

Content

The main body of the essay is described in chronological order, which is very good. It is very easy to read and very logical overall. I think the last paragraph of the essay could be more detailed about the patriarchal society in contemporary China, because in contemporary Chinese society there is much less patriarchy, but in work and life Chinese society is still under the patriarchal system.

Tone and Balance

The tone of the article is very neutral and does not show any obvious tendency or output of opinion. The content of the article is very close to the topic and does not try to convince the reader, but only describes the history of patriarchal society.

Sources and References

The sources cited in the article are from credible sources and span a wide range of time. I also believe that the content accurately reflects the content of the sources. More references could be used to add credibility to the article.

Organization

I really like the organization of this article, which is logical and easy to understand. The use of chronological descriptions makes it easier for the reader to feel the changes in society.