User:Cocomelon2005/Emma Tenayuca/Environmentography Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Jayda's and Aporinta's

Questions:


 * 1) Is there content missing or content that does not belong?

2. Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?

3. Is the content well organized?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cocomelon2005/Emma_Tenayuca?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/Emma_Tenayuca

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) doesn't seem to me like any missing content
 * 2) lead - include connections to communism
 * 3) yes - well organized, but don't have a) b) c) d) under "Labor union activism"

lead looks good; include something about ties to communism

does a source say why Tenayuca became interested in communism specifically?

for the photo: remove "Photograph shows the couple"

I like that you have a quote in a box

under "Legacy", the phrase "The admiration felt for her can be seen in..." isn't really neutral/necessary

is there any update/could you find anything on the 2021 biography written about Tenayuca?

Under "Labor union activism", it's really good that you have clearly organized and split the sections into a/b/c/d, but don't have the a/b/c/d, just have the info

sources look good

wording/grammar things that I would change:

under "Early life":

11 -> eleven

Mexico-U.S. War -> Mexican-American War (would be a good spot for a hyperlink)

under "Education and personal life"

In 1938-add comma after 1938

under "Political involvement"

"Another source of Tenayuca's first-hand knowledge of the struggles of working people came from"-i would say this sentence/wording isn't really necessary

Plaza del Zacate, which means grass plaza -> Plaza del Zacate ("grass plaza")

anticommunist -> anti-communist

Emma Tenayuca decided to leave the Communist Party -> Emma Tenayuca left the Communist Party

She finished a distant third -> She finished in third

Overall great job, you have definitely improved the original article in many ways

- Matthew Binder