User:Cocomonster0o/Chromosome jumping/Qzou3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

cocomonster


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cocomonster0o/Chromosome_jumping?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chromosome jumping

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

So overall this is really good. however in the first lead paragraph, since you compared chromosome jumping with chromosome walking so i think you can talk a bit more about chromosome walking as well just incase readers who do not have a through background about biotechnology. the advantages and disadvantages part are really good which the original link of this article did not include any. i think instead of having one sentence to explain and conclude each advantage and disadvantage, having a few more sentences in order to assist with explaining maybe more through. besides maybe different type of ways to present the advantage/disadvantages part can be good too. instead of a paragraph, maybe can use bullet-points and subtitles and sections. and the last paragraph about the technical application is really good. it makes the whole article look more complete. the only thing i suggest for this part is maybe including some diagrams and figures in assisting with a more visual and vivid presentation of how this technique is applied to address the complication of genetic disorder. so far i do not fully understand how this technique is helping addressing the genetic disorder. maybe a process diagram is going to help a lot.