User:Cole Trinter/Seston/Jljohnson1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cole Trinter


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cole Trinter/Seston


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Seston

Evaluate the drafted changes
This draft so far is very good! I love that there is a lot of detail provided in the draft. I do have some suggestions, though. I think that you could add hyperlinks within the articles to key terms, so you do not have to explain everything on this particular page. I think that the number of sources used was great; however, I was not able to click on them to explore them to make sure that they are credible. I think that if you add hyperlinks to the bibliography that that would help. I think that the amount of content added was very good, considering where the original wiki page started. I think that you could have tried to incorporate it into your version, though, but otherwise, I think that the content within this draft is good. If I could offer one suggestion, it would be to break up the material a bit more and add subtitles about what it is you are talking about. For example, when you talk about the harm that the Seston could cause, the text could be brought up in a different way so that it is not just one long paragraph of text. All in all, I think that the quality of the content added so far is very good.