User:Colettemort/Aerotaxis/LexiKoplin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Collettemort


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Colettemort/Aerotaxis?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead could use more information instead of the 2 sentences, incorporate what has been added to give a better overview of the entire topic. The lead is clear about what it is however more information could be added.

The content is neutral and educating. The sources are current, you should update the 1999 article to a more current one.

10 decades should be changed to ten. Take out "actually" in paragraph 2, sentence 2. Oxygen doesn't need to be a capital O in the second paragraph. Go into more detail regarding how this relates to signal transduction. The links are throughout the article which allows the article to be researched further.

You could include the cycle of aerotaxis, a diagram. Adding headings to the paragraphs so be able to distinguish what is discussed in each would make the article look better. Sources are reputable sources.

It is a great start to the article, more can be added and explained in more detail.