User:Colettemort/Aerotaxis/ZS010270 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Colettemort


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Colettemort/Aerotaxis?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Taxis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great job! This is a good start. I loved how you guys tried to explain aerotaxis in your own way, making it more understandable for the reader. I think this article has great potential.

The lead section seems a little short for now. Perhaps a brief overview of your sections will help lengthen it.

As for sections, this article would greatly benefit from it for orientation sake.

In paragraph 2, a statement was made starting with "It was concluded...". I was wondering, who made the conclusion in paragraph 2? More detail perhaps so readers don't have to skim through the references.

Good looking references by the way!

I loved paragraph 4. This is a great definition for aerotaxis, and I think maybe it would be a good idea to include it earlier in the article.

One thing I really like about some Wikipedia pages is their hyperlinks of topics mentioned in the paper to Wikipedia pages about those topics. For example, a hyperlink could inserted for taxis to help the reader get a better idea of what you're talking about.Overall, great job, and great outlook for the article.