User:Colin Denny/Luke Bryan/Apocketfullofsunshinee Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Colin_Denny


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Colin_Denny/Luke_Bryan&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&veaction=edit&redirect=no


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Luke Bryan

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Colin! The edits you plan to make to this article are great and you have some very important pieces of information that should be added to the article. By reviewing your draft, while everything is looking pretty good, there are a few things that I might suggest helping improve your article slightly.

In the first paragraph edits, there is the chance that it is slightly disorganized with information of the kids and miscarriage, I typed out a slight alteration of this phrase if you are interested :)

'''Bryan is married to Caroline Boyer. The two married on December 8, 2006, and have two sons together, Thomas Boyer Bryan, born March 18, 2008, and Tatum Christopher Byran, born August 11, 2010. After their first son Thomas was born Caroline suffered from a miscarriage. She states, "I know it's not my fault,” she still wanted to try again, and their youngest child Tatum was born in 2010. Caroline still thinks about her miscarriage all the time and states it is one of the worst moments of her life.'''

You could do certain small tweaks like adding in the children's full names and better organize it to understand the miscarriage came before the birth of Tatum

In the second half of the personal life section, I noticed there are just some slight grammatical errors that could be tweaked. One would be removing the "a" before Williamson County as it's not really needed in this specific sentence, you could also add the year of Bryan's sister passing (2007) to just help give readers a better overview!

For the early life portion of the article, you could also add the date of Luke and Caroline meeting (1998)

For the hosting portion, Maybe think about adding the date for the most recent award showing coming up that he is hosting

All and all these are great article changes you plan to make, all the information you plan to add is very informative and unbiased, as well as any reader who wants to know more about Luke Bryan in a whole!