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Assignment # 3

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Proposed Changes

The cause of specific phobias can vary based on the phobia itself, but can include genetics, environmental influences, conditioning, and other indirect pathways. Causes can be both experiential and non-experiential; for example, there appears to be a stronger genetic component to blood-injection-injury phobias compared to animal phobias, which are more likely to stem from an experience.

1. Muris P, Merckelbach H. Specific Phobia: Phenomenology, Epidemiology, and Etiology. In: Davis III TE, Ollendick TH, Öst L-G, editors. Intensive One-Session Treatment of Specific Phobias [Internet]. New York, NY: Springer New York; 2012 [cited 2020 Nov 17]. p. 3–18.

2. Shimada‐Sugimoto M, Otowa T, Hettema JM. Genetics of anxiety disorders: Genetic epidemiological and molecular studies in humans. Psychiatry and Clinical Neurosciences. 2015;69(7):388–401.

Rationale for proposed change

After discussion with my assignment mentor, I decided to outline the generally accepted etiology of specific phobias, along with a short statement about how the etiology can vary depending on the sub-type, with an example as well. This statement is important for readers to understand why these phobias exist, and provide them avenues to investigate the etiology of a particular specific phobia of interest.

As mentioned in the Talk section, the etiology of Specific phobias is not properly discussed. The article is directed towards the health aspect of the phobia, but neglects the large body of research on the source of these phobias, being both nonexperiential and experiential. In terms of controversies within the field, there are a few different paradigms/organizations for the source of specific phobias, which is why I chose to most cited and understandable among them to represent the information in the Wikipedia article.

Critique of Source

The article itself is not very biased, but the fact that the authors are also the pre-eminent authors for a few of the articles they cite, could produce bias. This, however, is done to a degree that isn’t concerning.

The article is very evidence based and well sourced, but does tend to not convey facts in a very easy to understand way, which is a limitation for Wikipedia viewers who want to investigate the article further.

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page?

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 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2020/Talk Page Template