User:Colleenlu/Cimex lectularius/Colleenlu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Victotp1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Colleenlu/Cimex_lectularius?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cimex lectularius

Lead
The lead has been updated to reflect the newly added content. This was found in the last paragraph of the lead and briefly explained how bed bugs were controlled by pesticides. However, the lead contained information that was not explained in later parts of the article (ex. disease). This includes the second, third, and fourth paragraphs of the lead. Due to the amount of detail in these paragraphs, they could be removed from the lead and added to a new section that focuses on the potential harm of the insect. Additionally, I would suggest adding a brief explanation about the insect's life cycle and occurrence/distribution to the lead to introduce the reader to the article. Lastly, the lead currently does not have any references. I would suggest adding references in the lead to add credibility.

Content
The original and added content contained appropriate information about the insect topic. More specifically, the added content included information on how to manage bed bugs via various treatments. This information was relevant to the topic of Cimex lecturlarius. The content was also up to date and was supported by articles from 2008-2016.

Tone and Balance
The added content was neutral and did not contain underrepresented or overrepresented concepts. Victoria did an excellent job on explaining various pesticides without mentioning which ones are "the best." For this reason, the added content does not attempt to persuade the reader to one position.

Sources and References
The lead, "Life cycle" section, and "Occurrence and Distribution" section were not backed up by any sources. I would suggest adding sources to these sections to make the information more credible. For the "Pest Control" section, the sources did back up the information added to the article. These sources were thorough and were reviewed scientific articles. Therefore, the used sources were reliable. Additionally, the sources were current and were published between 2008-2016. The sources were also from a variety of different authors and journals. In addition, all of the resource links worked.

Organization
The added information was concise and clear. Since there is a lot of information in the "Pest Control" section, I would suggest adding subheadings to the section. For example, some subheadings can include "Chemical treatments," "Non-chemical treatments," "Combination treatments," and "Physical control" Additionally, there were a few suggestions of changes that I have listed below:


 * Write out the unabbreviated form of "DDT"
 * "... bed bug populations were not able to be fully eliminated..."
 * "Many attempts have been made to combat this resistance, such as supplementing pyrethroid treatments with other chemicals such as piperonyl butoxide (PBO) and insect growth regulators (IGRs), which have been poorly successful due to inefficient rates of elimination and inconsistent termination results." I would suggest splitting this into two sentences.
 * "alternative pest control methods to chemical treatment have included"
 * "To control the spread of bed bugs, alternative pest control methods to chemical treatment has included combination treatments which include chemical treatment combined with a treatment that does not involve chemicals, such as heat and cold treatment and vacuuming." - "Include" was used twice in this sentence so it made it a little confusing. I would suggest using another word to replace "include"

Images and Media
The article does contain images that enhances the understanding of the topic. The added captions to the images were also extremely useful. However, one of the images from the original article does not have a caption. I would suggest adding a caption to this image. To my understanding, all the images in the article adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations. Furthermore, the images were positioned near its associated information, making the article organized and visually appealing.

Overall Impressions
Overall, the added content did make the article more complete. Victoria did a great job at finding scientific articles for her added section, "Pest Control." She backed her information with experiments and retrieved her information from a variety of sources involving different authors and journals. Her added images and hyperlinks were also effective in helping me, as a reader, understand the text better. Some ways to improve the article include 1) adding a section for diseases, 2) adding a brief description about the life cycle and distribution in the lead, 3) adding sources to information lacking references, 4) fixing grammatical errors, and 5) adding subheadings to "Pest Control."