User:Colleenrushnak/Word Wall/Naro13 Peer Review

General info
Colleenrushnak
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

https://w.wiki/9Zx2
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://w.wiki/9Zw$
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * While reading your “Lead” I noticed that you did not update it with additional content you included in your Sandbox draft.  For example, this section did not include an introduction to the “English Language Learners” section or the “Students with Disabilities” you had written about.  I would suggest adding this to the lead so that the reader knows that there will be a section in the article that will focus on those topics.  I would say though, that your lead section is very concise.  In order to improve it I would focus on adding more to the lead as previously mentioned.

Content:


 * After reading the content of your contributions I think they were a good addition to the article.  The original article was very concise and lacked a lot of information.  Much of the information you added to the article is up to date.  I actually liked the addition of research on students.  ELLs and students with disabilities can be underrepresented populations therefore including how these students can benefit from word walls was a good addition.  Something I took note of was that you mentioned that word walls support vocabulary but do not teach it.  When you brought this up I noticed that you did not include specific examples of how to use a word wall.  Although for us teachers we would love to hear different strategies, the general public on Wikipedia would normally not be interested in reading a bunch of different teaching strategies especially if they are not teachers.

Tone and Balance:


 * The tone of the information you included was very neutral.  As a whole though, I would say that the article would be trying to persuade someone to use a word wall.  Even though the tone is neutral, the overall concept of the article surrounds the use of word walls and the benefits of having these as part of daily instruction which could then convince someone to implement it in their class.

Sources and References:


 * I think that you found and added great references.  I noticed that the original article does not contain many but your contribution was a great addition to add more information to the article.

Organization:


 * With what you have added I think that the article is well organized.  I appreciated how you added the history of it since when thinking of word walls that wasn’t something I had even considered.