User:Connor mccaskey/Muriel Petioni/Mbstjohn Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

connor mccaskey


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Connor mccaskey/Muriel Petioni
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Muriel Petioni

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that you have done an excellent job of adding a lead section with a good introductory sentence, summary, and context. You included a great sense of organization in your article, with strong content about Dr. Petioni, and you kept a good balance on the subject as well as a neutral tone in your article.

The only possible suggestion I can make here is to perhaps include a bit more variety with the use of your sources, if possible. I say this because each paragraph seems to correlate entirely with one source; perhaps you could include information from each source a bit throughout each paragraph.