User:Consast/Care work/Emmamwasserman Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Consast


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Consast/Care work


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * care work

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft looks great. It is well researched and comprehensive. However, I do have a few suggestions which could strengthen the work. First, I would add more information to the first section "family and community". It seems rather vague - what kind of communities? how long did this social norm exisit? Additionally, it seems to say between the lines that women were not disadvantaged in the realm of care work before the industrial revolution, so I'd be clear that this was not this case, but rather the oppression took a different form.

Next, I think there is a few times spelling is not clear. "core work" is often written, and i'm pretty sure you mean "care work" so be wary of that. Just a tiny note.

Third, I think that your section on the industrial era is very informative, but I am not sure that's quite the right title for it, as you only discuss the industrial revolution for the first paragraph. Maybe change it to something like "the effects of industrialization"? Also, I'd make clear in your paper whether you are discussing the US or other countries. I'd also suggest adding some Marxist theory or Federici to your research - not necessarily for just the wiki article, as you already have so many sources, but for your final paper too!