User:Contrerasbri/Ni una menos/Vielka.g Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?  Contrerasbri
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Contrerasbri/Ni_una_menos?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ni una menos

Evaluate the drafted changes
So far, the content that has been added seems appropriate for the topic and it delves into the missing information that the original Wikipedia page does not include. The sources that were used are diverse and all the new content is backed up by the cited sources. It is clear that the sources are reliable and serve as a good backbone for your additions. Though, I would suggest to cite more within the paragraphs as it seems that only one citation is typically used at the very end. Even if you are citing from the same source more than once, it is okay to include that so that the reader knows that the information that you provided is reliably backed up by a credible source other than yourself. Overall, it is better to have a lot of citations than a lack of so that your work does not come off as you plagiarizing.

Additionally, I did notice that some of the language used was 'biased' or 'persuasive'. In the first entry (Mexico), it is mentioned that the movement played a "very prevailing role". While that may be the case, it does seem like you are trying to persuade the reader, so maybe you can revert back to a source where they mention the impact that the movement had and refer to that source. You can say "according to ____, in Mexico, the Ni Una Menos movement has played a very prevailing role" and then cite the source at the end. Under the same entry, I would suggest removing the word "Unfortunately" as that may also fall under biased wording. While it may not be your intention, it persuades the reader to have certain thoughts or ideologies on what you say. Under "The Green Tide" entry a similar instance occurs where you mention the huge impact that the movement had in other countries like Mexico. The same changes can be made in regards to citing a source that explicitly mentions that so that your writing does not seem biased towards the movement.

Besides that I find that you wrote a good amount of information that serves as a good contribution to the Wikipedia. The overall structure is good and the placement of your entries flows well. Given that the lead in the Wikipedia was already created, I think that their topic sentence flows with any changes you make so I don't see any issues in terms of conciseness and the readers ability to understand the goal of the Wikipedia.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading the changes you are making to the Wikipedia and I think that the topic you chose is very interesting!!