User:Cooki3monster676/The Hershey Company/Agman2026 Peer Review

This section written about the Hershey Company is relevant to the topic of sustainability to slow and prevent climate change. The article goes in depth and talks about the reduction of plastic used in packing and the reduction of GHG by 50% for Scope 1 and 2 and 25% for Scope 3. The article seems neutral as it is stating facts about the Hershey Company and how they are planning to reduce both emissions and plastic waste. The plastic reduction and the lowering of GHGs were talked about enough but maybe the author can talk more about the emissions from transporting their product, more information on the water depletion, and deforestation and afforestation efforts. All of the citations and links work. These links are helpful in understanding the overall affects that cocoa has on its environment. Finally, just more more evidence on the transportation emissions, water depletion, and deforestation and afforestation as the other topics have evidence and sources. The sources used though are academic journals and analyzed research in journal form. Other than the points listed above, this is a good start for your contribution.

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