User:CoolQuokka/Greek colonisation/Orangearnie Peer Review

General info
Whose work are you reviewing?

CoolQuokka

Link to the draft you're reviewing

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CoolQuokka/Greek_colonisation?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Greek colonisation



Lead
The lead has not been edited to reflect the changes made to the rest of the draft. The lead as it exists is concise and reflects the most important information that is addressed but could include a brief description of motives for colonization, as this is an important section of the article that is not introduced in the lead. If more information is added to the final draft this may need to be reflected in the lead. Another potential edit the the lead could be including the most important states colonized by the Greeks.

Content
The timing section from the original article has been renamed to "history." This change is effective, as the content of this section provides an overview to the history of Greek colonization. No new content has been added to this section except for a rewording of the first few sentences. The content that remains in this section is relevant to the topic. More content could be added which provides historical context for the events which would have been important to the colonies that are listed or those which would have prompted Greek colonization in those areas.

Tone and Balance
The content currently in the sandbox is neutral in tone and addresses the history of Greek colonization in a way that does not appear biased towards Greek nor the countries which Greece colonized. A more balanced approach may include the reactions or attitudes of colonized countries towards the Greeks; this could be added to the location section or included as an entirely new section.

Sources and References
No references have been added to this article to back up the added content. While no content has been added to the motives section of the article, references could be added to this section even if no content is added for the final draft, as there are no sources cited in the original article. The sources in the original article include a variety of secondary sources as well as primary authors such as Thucydides, Plutarch, Pausanias, and Strabo. These could be good sources to consult for adding references to the motives section, as well as for sourcing the added content.

Organization
The section which lists the Greek colonies before Alexander the Great has been re-organized in alphabetical order. This ensures that the section is much easier to read, as colonies can be found more easily found than in the original article. There are no grammatical or spelling errors in the added content, but the first two sentences of the history section are slightly redundant and could be made more concise.