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Lesbian, Gay, Bisexual, Transgender Discrimination

LGBT discrimination
Discrimination against LGBT (lesbian, gay, bisexual, transgender) and its consequences is something that people may never seriously think about, although many people get affected by it. The Equality Act of 2015 is a bill not yet passed by the House of Representatives and Senate, which prohibits discrimination on the basis of sex, gender, identity, and sexual orientation, and for other purposes. If this act is passed, then gay people will be considered equal because it is still legal to discriminate against gay people in many states. In 31 states of the United states, "people are at a risk of being fired, evicted or refused service just because they are LGBT." If discrimination based on sexual orientation and gender identity continues, it can lead to lower productivity of LGBT employees and increased suicide rates in the LGBT youth.

Experiencing discrimination based on sexual orientation and gender identity has lowered the productivity of LGBT employees. Crosby Burns argues on the issue of LGBT workplace and asserts that “Fifteen percent to 43 percent of gay and transgender workers” experienced some type of discrimination on the job. For example, Vandy Beth Glenn, who worked in the Georgia General Assembly got fired because she was a transgender. Her boss told her that she made people uncomfortable just for being herself. He fired her because he thought her transition was “unacceptable” and “inappropriate”. “I was escorted back to my desk, told to clean it out, then marched out of the building .. I was devastated." Another story was reported by Brook Waits, who worked in Dallas, Texas and got fired by her manager immediately after she saw Brook and her girlfriend photo on her cell phone. That afternoon she went from a highly paid job to being jobless. She argues that she worked hard and did her job very well. “I did not lose my job because I was lazy, incompetent, or unprofessional." She explains that she lost her job because she was lesbian. So, gay and transgender employees will have a greater psychological distress and health problems than who has not experienced any kind of discrimination. Unfair treatment with LGBT employees will result into diminishing “productivity, job satisfaction, and the mental and physical health of all employees." If businesses or communities fail to take an action against LGBT discrimination, employers will feel disgruntled, loose interest in working hard because they will not be satisfied with their job. As a consequence business, especially who are looking for a profit will have extreme loss.

Discrimination has also increased suicide rates in LGBT youth. According to Gael Jocelyn Blackman, who researched on LGBT youth discrimination happening in school reports that “Over 30 percent of all reported teen suicides each year are committed by gay and lesbian youth." It all starts from school. In school, LGBT youth is called “faggot”, “queer” or “dyke”. One lesbian students reported that how she faced harassment for several months and verbal threat which grew to physical abuse. “I got hit in the back of the head with an ice scraper." She explained how she got so used to being harassed. “I didn’t even turn around to see who it was." Another example entails about this one gay student who faced verbal assaults several times and students even thew items at him. Later on, a group of anti gay students “strangle him with drafting line so bad that it cut him." Subsequently, he also reported that he was “dragged down a flight of stairs and cut with knives by his classmates." Certainly, this discrimination, harassment and victimization have left LGBT youth very confused and broken. As a result of this discrimination, many of the LGBT youth may “form their own opinion on other and withdraw from people." All this can also lead to severe depression or “sleeplessness, excessive sleep, loss of appetite, and feeling of hopelessness." This is what majority of our LGBT youth is facing ,but not having enough support from parents or schools causes “depression, loss of interest, eating disorder and stress-related ailments” in LGBT youth and increases the rates of suicides.

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Schif46 (talk) 13:21, 17 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Good information
 * Hard to follow, rambling
 * Unorganized
 * Not neutral
 * 1) Take out certainly, seems opinionated
 * 2) Try not to act like you are fighting for gender equality, act like you are informing from neutral perspective
 * 3) Don’t say they are an invisible work force, maybe say society views them as one
 * 4) Don’t say something needs to be done, could say the goal of this organization is to
 * 5) Don’t say it is important to educate girls, this is opinionated, could say “Studies show there are more benefits to society with educated women…”
 * 6) Good describing what evidence says about it! This is the right idea
 * 7) Overall just fix any could, should, needs to, just focus on what sources say, proves, etc. do not let audience know your perspective, it is very clear what yours is, don’t use first person
 * Use more information from some sources than others, if you just try to maybe change from neutral and say the sources state information will help seem like there is more point of views than just yours
 * Order of information is good, just does not have that “flow”
 * Persuading more than informing
 * Mention how gender equality relates to topics
 * Don’t say it is huge problem; maybe say “this person describes gender equality as a growing issue…”
 * Some grammar mistakes
 * 1) Change hugely to something else
 * 2) Parallelism
 * 3) Make wife plural wives
 * 4) Overall flow, reword
 * 5) Girls’ rights plural
 * 6) Etc. just go over work and clean up grammar mistakes
 * Overall the information is good, but the presentation needs to be fixed. The changes I suggested will help form a more neutral perspective, rather than leaning towards one side. The most important things you could do to improve are make neutral, fix grammar, and reword to give more flow.