User:CooperR.Anthony/After-school activity/Zr-gpp-1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cooper R Anthony


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CooperR.Anthony/After-school_activity?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * After-school activity

Evaluate the drafted changes
This is the review for Cooper Anthony's "After school Activity Section".

Two important sections were added "history" and "funding", none of these two were included before in the article sections and they are importatn in order to udnerstand how after school activities came to be and where the money comes from for these activities. Her lead section points out the 3 ways in which the article will expand, in the actual article itself those points are made with references that are recent within the last 12 years. The references used are from different authors, so one voice is not overwhelming the article ,that is a strenght too. There is no grammar or spelling errors in the page.

I think these two sections should be placed under the "United States" section since they are more specific to the country, instead of the "Structure and Organization." For the "funding" section providing examples of how much money has been allocated for these activities in the past years would be useful or including an image of chart/ graphs/ anything that visually shows data and how funding has increased or decreased in the US