User:Cornyon/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Terrestrial locomotion

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article to evaluate because it is the article I have decided to add to for this project. My initial impression is that the article is that the introduction is a bit messy and disjunction, hopping between brief points about terrestrial locomotion rather quickly. Looking at the article from a human biology perspective, not enough attention is given to human morphology.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section.

The Introductory sentence describes the adaptation of animals from aquatic settings to terrestrial setting but the article itself more accurately reflects how animal morphology affects land movement of all species that live on land. The introduction has too many disjunct points regarding various forms of locomotion on land but neither flows nor reflects the sections of the article.

Content

The article definitely favors legged locomotion, which is natural due to how common it is among terrestrial organisms. Although the article mentions the various forms of legged movement, it does not elaborate on how these various forms of movement occur, simply that they exist.

Tone and Balance

The article is very neutral and does not attempt to say readers to any position.

Sources and References

This article is in severe need of secondary sources, much of the information provided is unsourced. Further much of the information provided is not from more recent studies. The articles are diverse, not over representing certain authors or journals. The sources can include more reliable sources other than websites.

Organization and Writing Quality

The article is concise, easy to read, and well written. However, it is not well organized with the introduction providing a chaotic overview of terrestrial movement, with many of the points not returning again.

Images and Media

There are images that enhance the article. Some of the images should be better described and sourced however.

Talk Page Discussion

The talk page of this article involves many ideas about including the variety of moved styles of locomotion specify to different species. Edits have been made to edit the lead, but the changes do not reflect the rest of the article. The article is the subject of WikiProject Animals and has been an area of discussion for an organismal biomechanics project.

Overall Impressions

This article is lacking in organization and in sources. By better organizing and introducing this article and providing stronger sources of information, this article will be a great representation of terrestrial locomotion.