User:Cornyon/Underground Astronauts/Kleaslemon Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cornyon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cornyon/Underground Astronauts
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Underground Astronauts

Evaluate the drafted changes
I see that Cornyon's focus is on improving the intro of the Underground Astronauts article since this is the main section of it. Personally I think the new information added is great and provided more details for people who want to know more about the Underground Astronauts. The tone of the new editing is natural. However I find the transitions between paragraphs a bit stiff. And while editing, it is best to leave other people's citation contributions when they are still relevant (Personal options, not necessary the truth). Hope this helps!