User:CorwinBM/Astigmatism/JudeAVM Peer Review

General info
CorwinBM
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:CorwinBM/Astigmatism
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Astigmatism

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you did a good job expanding this section while breaking up the information so it flows and is not an overwhelming block of text.

I saw that the first paragraph referenced ‘the study’ that reported the prevalence of astigmatisms in China. I am unsure what the study being referenced is, as it mentions the WHO as well as a compilation of reviews earlier in the paragraph, perhaps consider clarifying what the study is.

I was a little confused in regards to your fourth paragraph, in that because later in the paragraph discussed how things changed with age, I was unsure whether the prevalence mentioned were for the total or a specific range of ages.

The references look good, being reliable and reviews, and I think you did well paraphrasing and picking out the important/pertinent information.