User:Corydoney55/Alison ramsdell/This is Axel Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Corydoney55)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Corydoney55/Alison_ramsdell?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Corydoney55/Alison_ramsdell?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Lead): The lead of the article happens to be very consist and straight to the point. This will allow viewers to gather relevant information quickly. Demographics were provided swiftly and well organized, there would seem to be no reason to change the lead. Job well done.

(Content): With the content provided Alison's demeanor matches the context provided. With all of her accolades and achievements the content provides massive credibility. The only thing I would look to change is the order of the picture. I feel the last picture displayed should go first as it shows what she looks like. Than allowing it to flow down beautifly, other than that the content was a perfect representation of what she represents.

(Tone /Balance): Reading over the article there seems to be a tone that is very neutral creating a balance between the pictures and the context provided. Typically writers tend to be biased toward a particular side to due to values and moral beliefs. This articles so happens to be full of factual relevant information that leaders the reading to keep on going.

(Sources): The sources are relevant, leading to valid articles.

(Organization): Is well developed and put together. It allows for the viewers to gather information rather quickly, including reliable sources and links.

- Overall the article was well put together with descriptive reliable information and sources. The narrative of the article was well placed allowing for viewers and others with an outside perspective to really flow with the words.