User:CourseAccount2024/Bariatric surgery/Ckyin19 Peer Review

CourseAccount2024 (talk) 02:31, 15 November 2023 (UTC)

General info
CourseAccount2024
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Bariatric surgery

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Overall, you guys did a great job editing the article and added a lot of valuable information
 * Given the rise in obesity among adolescents, I appreciate the addition of a few paragraphs on considerations in this patient population
 * Great job of updating a significant number of citations and adding links to other Wikipedia articles
 * The article is also very readable
 * Good job adjusting the formatting to align with the Wikipedia Manual
 * Great job providing quality information while remaining neutral
 * Planned edits based on the workplan were all met
 * Possible edits:
 * Given that there are multiple techniques it may be helpful to add more information regarding which procedures may be preferred based on patient characteristics or comorbidities
 * Could be helpful to add more detail to the captions for the images in the techniques section
 * For the section on adolescent patients, I know the current literature is limited, but are there any reviews that discuss short-term outcomes for these patients and demonstrate that it can be a successful procedure in terms of quality of life or short-term weight loss? If so, it may be helpful to add a couple sentences about this.

Reply: CourseAccount2024 (talk) 02:31, 15 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the well-thought out review and suggestions! I have revised the technique sections (and am continuing to do so) as per your suggestions and that of a another editor on the main talk page to trim this section and make it easier to read/more focused on the highlights and major need-to-know points.
 * I have added details to the captions for the technique section images for clarity.
 * I have expanded the adolescent patient section to better encompass what current literature/reviews report on long-term outcomes for these patients as the short-term reviews are a bit more sparse and in disagreement. Will continue to look for another review to add and improve this section.
 * Thank you again for taking the time to help with this article!