User:CourseAccount2024/Bariatric surgery/Courseaccount333 Peer Review

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Petersonmk18
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Bariatric surgery
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Bariatric surgery

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Peer review feedback (by CourseAccount333)


 * Overall great job, added excellent content, sources, and enhanced the "readability" of the article
 * Article is understandable and easy to read
 * I appreciate the removal of lots of historical facts that may not have been as relevant. Much more to the point and concise now; also this made the article more easily readable
 * Completed workplan goals
 * Included appropriate sources
 * Great job updating sources to be more recent
 * Links added (such as the sleeve gastrectomy link, etc.) work
 * Article's structure is organized and flows well
 * I like the new section on pregnancy complications you made
 * Suggested edits:
 * Add a citation after every sentence that you added, instead of only at the end of the section
 * Include periods at the end of each sentences