User:CourtneyReko/Mbole people /Brown34s Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Courtney Reko
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Mbole people

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? The lead has not been updated by this person. The lead is composed of one, run-on sentence. I suggest including a concise paragraph that outlines the topics that will be discussed in the article.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? I think all content added is relevant to the lifestyle of the Mbole people. I am not sure if your contributions to the Origin and Culture are sentences you would like to add to the existing article, or if they are beginnings to a rewrite of these sections.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Based off of the resources' dates, most information seems to come from the mid-1900s. This may be the most recent information that is available of these people.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? The Agriculture and Economy seems to provide decent background information about how the agriculture functions in Mbole society. A more thorough explanation of the agricultural techniques and use of palm oil could supplement this article. I think the addition of the Statues and Lilwa Society were well-written and very thorough. Are there other potential rituals or objects that are significant to their culture? The Culture section mentions the names of members of large or small clans. Do certain members serve any kind of control over other family members?

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? The Religion section provides good information on what the Mbole believe in. However, I am wondering if they have certain places that they practice their religion? For example, like a church or mosque.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Each paragraph cites the new content with a reliable source of information.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes. The sources take me exactly to the book or article that is cited.
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? I felt like your article was very easy to follow and read. I feel like you have simplified the information that is comprehendible enough for your readers.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? My only suggestion for grammatical correction would be in your Agriculture and Economy section. You state that "The land is covered mainly by marshy forests and receives lots of rain all year long." I would suggest a different word choice other than the world "lots."
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes. I feel like the Lilwa Society and Statues must remain as their own headings because you have provided such a significant amount of information on both topics.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? I highly recommend finding images of the statues to help supplement how these objects looked.
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? I definitely feel like the article has benefited from your contributions. Again, I am not sure if you are rewriting the Origin and Culture sections, but the content in the Origin section of the original article does seem to provide solid information of where they Mbole come from. I still recommend keeping this information on the page. I noticed that you created the Lilwa society as its own section that was once under the Culture section in the original article. I think making this its own heading is beneficial to the article since it seems to be such a large topic for Mbole people.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The strengths of this article are the addition of Statues and Lilwa Society.
 * How can the content added be improved? Some improvements can be made in the Agriculture and Economy section. What is the significance of palm oil? How does it benefit or function in particular to Mbole? How exactly do the Mbole rely on agriculture? I'm curious to know if there are other rituals/events that are significant to the Mbole, that could be something to include if that information is available. Are there more art objects that are relevant to the Mbole other than the statues?
 * Overall I think you have a great start to your article!