User:Covatous/Jose Gomez-Marquez/DFloresVVC Peer Review

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Jose Gomez-Marquez
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You have secondary sources - awesome job!

I noticed that you referenced resources in your article that were not listed in your bibliography. My suggestion would be that you include them.

Also, here are a few suggestions for your Career and Research section:

Gomez-Marquez is the Program Director for Innovations in International Health at MIT and Little Devices Lab. He has figured out a way to extract parts from toys and create these medical instruments for children at a low cost rate. He's designed a way for people to build their own diagnostics and be put together in labs at a cheap cost. 'He is the Program Director for Innovations in International Health at Massachusetts Institute of Technology. Maquez is currently the co-director of Little Devices Lab at MIT.' He is one of the cofounders at MakerNurse, established in 2013. He is also cofounder of LDTC+ Labs, and also serves on the European Union’s Science Against Poverty Initiative Task Force.

Feedback:

1. "these" in the first sentence sounds like it is referencing something that isn't disclosed in your article.

2. The two sentences sound redundant, I would suggest the use of a coordinating conjunction or a semi-colon.

3. "He's" - we shouldn't use contractions in Wiki articles

'''4. You stated that he is the Program Director at MIT and Little Devices Lab in the first sentence and then restated it again except noted that he is co-founder of Little Devices. My suggestion would be to add co-founder of Little Devices to the first sentence because omitting that makes it seem like he is the Program Director there. If you wanted to restate this information again, I would add something like: "In addition to being the Program Director for Innovations in International Health at MIT and co-founder of Little Devices Lab, he is also the cofounder of LDTC+ Labs, and also serves on the European Union’s Science Against Poverty Initiative Task Force."'''

5. If you're going to keep it the same, Marquez is misspelled in the second to last sentence.

6. If his last name is Gomez-Marquez, it should be reflected throughout the article, and not just Marquez.