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Eldad ha-Dani article review:

This article is concerning, not only grammatically, but also academically. Certain sentences are incomplete and do not flow nor connect from one idea to the next. In the section on his travels, there is an incorrect quote that also lacks a citation. Certain details are also not elaborated, such as the four different types of "capital punishment." Additionally, the article comes off as having a passive aggressive opinion about Eldad's accounts. Words such as "fanciful," among other descriptors, can lace a biased opinion into the article. In editing, I will attempt to fix grammatical errors, add in citations, fix quotes, and rework sentences so that the correct information is given where the original idea occurs.