User:Cris93sand/User:CSUSBKale/Patrick Martinez/Cris93sand Peer Review

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CSUSBKale


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 * Patrick Martinez
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Make the introduction paragraph more concise and clear with just the facts, then later you can dive more into the background behind his reasons for making art under its own heading. The intro can include what he's currently working on, what he is most known for, what mediums he uses and where he's from. I think you have a good understanding of what he does so just make the intro concise to reflect who he is as an artist.

Basically, just include a brief description for the article's major section.

Content

Content is relevant to the topic and seems to be up-to-date but I did notice there's no mention of what he's currently being exhibited in. There's a NYT article on the exhibition ESTAMOS BIEN - LA TRIENAL 20/21, as promoted by him on his instagram.

Add more about his work and background as an LA artist; his first artistic works as a graffiti artist for example.

Tone and Balance

The content is neutral. I would include more about Martinez's interactions with police brutality. Perhaps under a section for Mixed Media where his most notable work is under.

Sources and Resources

Sources are reliable. Cited sources are accurate, but there needs to be more citations for information provided in the current intro and under Career and education.

Organization

Break down his career to exhibitions/solo exhibitions and notable work. Double check punctuation. Only capitalize the first word of the heading and any proper nouns.

Consider adding more headings such as: Biography, Exhibitions (Current Exhibitions), Awards, etc. His artist statement lists his solo exhibitions, as well as in his resume. Avantarte goes into his early career being a graffiti artist which is worth noting. Maybe a section for Black Lives Matters and his contribution to that movement.

Images and Media

Image, info box and content box is needed. In the information box include Born, Nationality, Known For, Notable work, and website (even though it doesn't seem to work at the moment),

Overall

There's a good foundation for this artist's wikipedia. Reread your work to correct any lack of punctuation since there's some sentences lacking it. I suggest finding and using a contemporary artist's wiki as a formatting example! This will help guide you with headings and sub-headings you might want to include for Martinez.

Use more references and sources! The artsy.net and avantarte.com pages on Martinez seems like reliable sources with more information on his work and quotes.