User:Crocaholic/Medea/Scorpiohistory Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Crocaholic


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Crocaholic/Medea?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Medea

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

Your lead looks very strong, and I like that you made it a little bit more concise than the original. It ensures that it's not overly detailed and makes it a lot easier to read for a quick summary. I'm not sure if using the word "she is best known for" is considered 'biased' but I suggest just re-wording that if possible.

Content:

The content you added is very relevant, and I think you did a good job fixing many aspects of the article. Additionally, I think the hyper-links to other wiki pages definitely helps this article, and makes it easier for readers to understand.

Tone:

There are definitely a few instances that could sound more neutral and less biased. I'll just copy the statements that sound biased below and I suggest taking them out or re-formatting the sentences.


 * "From here, Medea's family tree becomes a little more complicated and argued."
 * "The importance of Medea's genealogy is to help define what level of divinity she possessed."

Organization:

I believe that if you split your Mythology section into sub-sections, it would be a little bit easier to read. At the moment, the page looks very content heavy, and by adding small sub-divisions you'll be able to make it easier for readers to comprehend. Otherwise, the content that you re-wrote is very well written, and I think with just a little bit of tweaking can make the article much better.

Sources:

I think your sources are good, I wouldn't focus too much on them since it seems like there are already a very large amount of references. If you're able to find references to the myths I would include those, but otherwise I would focus more on the organization and tone aspects of the article.

Media:

I think if you're able to find more images, or media of depictions of Medea, or her myth with Jason, it would not only help divide the article and make it easier to understand visually, but could also help add more information to the article.