User:Cruckert/Race and crime in the United Kingdom/Sisselerickson Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cruckert


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cruckert/Race_and_crime_in_the_United_Kingdom?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Race and crime in the United Kingdom
 * Race and crime in the United Kingdom

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Yes, the lead does start off with an introductory sentence. I think they have done a good job at adding information to the sandbox draft that may have been missing in the original article.